Dear Heart : Sad Poetry Writing by a Poet out of Pittsburgh Pennsylvania

written by Poet : teeteebear

Dear Love,

I cant turn back the hands of time,I can only move forward and try tomake things right.

Dear Heart,

I know I've shattered you,I;ve left you barely beating and unable to move.

Dear Hope,

I've ripped your shine away leaving you cold.Emptying your heart and damaging your soul.

Dear Forgiveness,

If given a chance to look into your eyes again.I would repair what I have done even if it means my death.

Originally Posted On Site: 2007-11-30 20:29:04
Last Login: 08.15.08

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Comments:

	orignal form I like the originality in your poem, your meters need a bit work but your message is really nice- I think you could redraft this to beat a bit more and in the end I think your promise should be to not only be sorry and make up by = not do again- just a thought but I think you have really interesting style and with some practise 4 certain a good poet, keep in mind most spend decades takes much practise and patience and many redrafts- but please accept this as a compliment because I only give advice when I see TALENT1	2007-12-01 00:00:00 Poet Blue-rose

	Excellent angle on writing I love how you wrote this poem and it just seemed to be written with a different style then Im use to! Excellent!	2007-12-01 00:00:00 Poet Jeff


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